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McCarthy Mental Health & Wellness Center
Author: Serpentiness (TM)
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(Added on Jun 30, 2002)
(This month 52738 readers) (Total 72046 readers) |
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MMHWC is set in the America of the insufficiently distant future, where the latest scare is SDD (Sexual Deviance Disorder). The real deviant is Doctor Lyons, a psychiatrist who uses the scare to involuntarily commit (IVC), torture, rape, modify and otherwise mistreat and deprive others of their liberties. |
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Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
slavemichael
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Jul 11, 2002 |
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A little bit too short.
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| Reviewer:
Beethovenfan
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Jul 7, 2002 |
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Author, please tidy up your story and repost it. Try using the spelling and grammar checking in MS Word (or equivalent). It could become an interesting and readable story with a bit more care. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lady Lance
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Jul 1, 2002 |
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While the author may have intended for the readers to give some thought about problems in society, there are so many problems with this story that reflection would be impossible without a serious overhaul of this story.
While I respect the author for being open to receiving grammar help, he obviously hasn't even run his story through spell check. Tongue is constantly spelled "tung", prologue is mispelled five different ways, and heck, they can't even spell grammar right! (He asked for 'gamer' help). The symbols inserted through out the the story are an issue of the format the story was submitted in, I'm sure, but as the story stands now it is nigh impossible to read.
And an aside: Drop the fake ebonics. Unless you can write in proper English, don't try writing dialects. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
hyphen666
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Jul 1, 2002 |
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This one looks like a snippet, acts like a snippet and sounds like a snippet. I wonder what the conclusion should be? Not only that, it also has a new method for distracting the reader, those arcane symbols that indicate that something is awry between what the author sent and what we are expected to read. This is one large waste of time and appears to be a knockoff of the Felicity Camp series. This deserves a lower rating, but I give the author some credit for cheekiness. (2/10)
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