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Hermione's Wrong Spell Author: Kevin Clik
(Added on Sep 3, 2002) (This month 62417 readers) (Total 76455 readers)
Sub Story of Harry Potter's Sequence. Hermione use spell on her own and Harry meet his first pleasure...

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Weighed Average (?): (3/10)
Average Rating: (3/10)
Highest Rating: (3/10)
Lowest Rating: (2/10)

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Reviewer: master_wolf (Edit) Rating: Feb 19, 2005
get an editor (2/10)

Reviewer: D. Atrocity (Edit) Rating: Jul 27, 2004
You've got some good ideas here. You just need to take some English courses and get yourself an editor. Fanfic is fun and this could rate a lot higher if you'd just fix some of those errors. By the way, who is Chloe? Did you mean Cho Chang, the Ravenclaw seeker? (3/10)
Replied by: ztory666 (Edit) (Sep 9, 2004)
you can review and post my story on other fanfic site. I'm very bad with English(Can't do anything about that.) And Chloe is Cho Chang.Z(you see how bad English I am)

Reviewer: mkemse (Edit) Rating: Apr 7, 2004
please leave harry potter and his gang to kids and the book stores (3/10)

Reviewer: omechron (Edit) Rating: Sep 4, 2002
1) The main problem here is the spelling and grammar. If I were you, I'd get a beta reader, because my friends stuff looks kind of like that before I beta read it.
2) the philistenes around here don't like fanfiction, especially about younger target audience stuff like HP or Digimon. I sugest you post your work on fanfiction.net, or else provide LOTS of backstory which is not worth it for these mooks. You dun wanna have to go over the first 3 books do you?
4) Plotwise it is good except... "Womo Vagini"? Why did Harry know a pussy thawing spell? I would've had him use a generic dispell magic spell and then a warmth or something...
5) I haven't read the 3rd book yet, so you should not have mentioned Chloe or had a spoiler warning. (3/10)

Reviewer: S_Couture (Edit) Rating: Sep 3, 2002
English is probably not your native tongue. Elements of Style by Strunk and White would do wonders to improve the readability. (3/10)

Reviewer: bluezy (Edit) Rating: Sep 3, 2002
I may not be fluent in english, but that story was written by someone who did not even bother to think about what it would be like to read it
(2/10)

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