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Deena On Display
Author: Jessica Verdi
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(Added on Sep 20, 2002)
(This month 84126 readers) (Total 134473 readers) |
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Deena Wilson is found guilty of an alcohol-related motoring offence. To avoid a prison sentence she agrees to a community service order and becomes a living model on a human biology lecture tour. Her bodily functions and sexual responses are examined and displayed in front of hundreds of students every day. Could it be the making of her? (Complete story) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 10, 2004 |
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all in all enjoyable (8/10)
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Wyn
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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This was an enjoyable story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Nov 23, 2002 |
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Ms Verdi shows intriguing flashes of inspiration here and there, but I find her work a bit frustrating. She wrote a first chapter called "Hog Heaven" (or something similar) which seemed to promise some delightful bondage, but to which she has not returned. And she wrote "Plumber's Revenge" which featured two very appealing characters, who also were left hanging after a couple of chapters. And now DWI Deena has left me, um, dangling for almost a month, wondering what will become of her lovely blonde self.
Jessica, bellissima, -- enough with this coitus interruptus, already! We love your stories! How about you finish one? ;-)
Your fan and paisan,
Giovanni (7/10)
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- Replied by:
JGVerdi
(Edit) (Nov 24, 2002)
- Boccaccio, I'm sure you don't need me to tell you that there is more to life than writing these little stories! ;-). "Plumber's Revenge" is sort of finished, albeit quirkily. The 2nd chapter received very little feedback, although I didn't think it was that bad. "Hog Heaven" was an ill-conceived idea that I won't be returning to. Yes, "Deena on Display" is unfinished, but I'm working on chapter 4 at present, and trying hard to make it an enjoyable and worthwhile read. Thanks for your kind words and encouragement, I really appreciate it. Hoping you will enjoy the soon to be posted chapter 4.
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| Reviewer:
4abdul
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Oct 11, 2002 |
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Excellent. Public humilation is very senual. Expecially when the girl is in chains.
She may no like but she submits. Can not wait for the next installment. (10/10)
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rainee
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Oct 2, 2002 |
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A very well written story, realistic for the time period as well as authentic.The character and plot development well above most stories posted on this site.Keep up the great work and I anxiously await further chapters (9/10)
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Taisho
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Sep 26, 2002 |
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Hehe, Prime Minister David Blunkett of the British Republic - love it :) Was it a 'Very British Coup' with Queenie invited to retire to a nice house in the country? Just the sort of story I love. Well written and a delicious scenario with wonderful possibilities. Some people have other tastes and perhaps they should stick to those and leave the stories they dislike alone. Can't understand the comment about 'incomplete story' - Its common practice on this site to post in chapters. Top marks from humble moi! Hope you do continue here but if not let us know if you post elsewhere. 'The Speculum' site might be an appropriate place... (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
sarah
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Sep 26, 2002 |
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Oh Jessica, pay no attention to all this s...t! You write well and in an arousing manner don't let one bad review from someone who should know better put you off...who cares about what he thinks...keep going and please the rest of us! (9/10)
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hyphen666
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Sep 24, 2002 |
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As I suspected there is a story lurking in the author, and so far so good. It appears that she either is a member of the medical profession, or closely allied with someone who is. Unlike many authors she is writing about something she knows, thus avoiding the pitfall of creating another set of distractions to the harried reader. On the other hand I was decidedly overmatched when it came to the technical terms, and did get a great deal of exercise going back and forth between my large dictionary and the monitor. Except for a few minor pecadillos the writing is smooth and obedient to the laws of grammar. I am looking forward to Deena's further adventures. My rating has thus risen for the reasons I just provided. In summary it is a solid effort to date with a great deal of potential for growth under certain circumstances. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
hyphen666
(Edit) (Sep 25, 2002)
- What can I possibly say except good luck in your future avocation. Will your friend Mellanie be leaving as well?
- Replied by:
JGVerdi
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2002)
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| Reviewer:
bleuf
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Sep 23, 2002 |
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A story worth reading (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jonathan
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Sep 23, 2002 |
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This story seemed a little far fetched to me in that it required more than the
usual suspension of belief. Nonetheless, it's well written and a pretty good story
so far. Like Hyphen, however, I have a big problem with the "so far". This is
even more annoying with a good story than with a lousy one. At the very least,
it should contain a warning label "WARNING--Incomplete Story". I still don't get
it. What's the point of posting part of a story?
I, too, was put off by the "shall I continue?" at the end. If you have to ask, the
answer is "no". (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
andy_fl
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Sep 23, 2002 |
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I think its a good start to a potentially excellent story. I get turned on when the subject / victim is in a state sanctioned public humiliation situation. Please continue. I would love to have deana commit some seamingly minor infraction that forces her ever deeper into the situation :"Its required by law" after all. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
fincon1
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Sep 21, 2002 |
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I really enjoyed it. I hope you'll carry on with the story. (9/10)
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