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Emma's Capture
Author: English George
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(Added on Jan 8, 2003)
(This month 53542 readers) (Total 79142 readers) |
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A Short story about a girl who is abducted after school. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (6/10) |
Average
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 14, 2004 |
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i liked, that simple (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Tom Wilson
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Feb 24, 2004 |
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Good story but a bit short. It could use a bit more description of the clothing, etc. (4/10)
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Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Dec 25, 2003 |
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Just fair. A familiar plot (pretty girl abducted by man/men in van) with very thin characterization that ends rather abruptly. But not a bad first effort in the sense that it contains a relatively small number of grammatical errors for a first story. The author is on more solid ground than many first-timers in that respect.<br>If I may be permitted a brief editorial -- I think authors should ask themselves the question "How is my story different from other stories of this type?" It is next to impossible to be truly original, but we should all try to be 'different', each of us catering to our own strengths and backgrounds. Some will emphasize character or psychology, some will be better at action, or setting or dialogue. Find your own strong suit(s), George, and then structure your stories around that strength. (5/10)
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Reviewer:
Terry Gabriola
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Jan 14, 2003 |
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Got to agree wholeheartedly with the other reviewers. Don't like the lack of ending, I must admit. And one or two grating errors such as Nitrofox pointed out. But don't be disheartened: there's enough there to work on. (5/10)
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Reviewer:
Powerone
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Jan 9, 2003 |
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It disappointed me at the end. It built up to a point where they were about to rape her and then the rape lasted about a paragraph. Seems like the author got tired and wanted to stop writing. (5/10)
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Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Jan 9, 2003 |
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A nice story. Ok plot, and fairly decent writing. The two things that jumped out at me were "fantasy's", and "petit". One thing though. They ostensibly spend months working on this plan, and their plan is to stand behind a bush and punch her in the stomach, and throw her in a van? It doesn't take months to think up a plan like that. The story would also have benefited from being longer. (7/10)
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