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Whatever You Want
Author: Wontworry
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(Added on Aug 24, 2003)
(This month 148369 readers) (Total 250762 readers) |
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Two men force a housewife to become their personal permanent fuck-toy. Later chapters will describe how her daughters are also enslaved in different ways, with various other forced sex and rape scenarios along the way. |
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| Reviewer:
Sue Evans
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Jul 22, 2004 |
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Another writer on this site, Dee Driscoll, suggested that I read this story because he thought it sounded like my thing. He was right. If you'd like my review, read his. He says it all. Highest score from me too. (10/10)
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wabbit
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Sep 30, 2003 |
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The addition of minors into the story is not really my thing, yet it was still a good read, and the author obviously knows His way around a keyboard. my only suggestion would be to perhaps slow down the pace a bit and really let the reader enjoy the suffering and humiliation of the victims (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dee Driscoll
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Sep 16, 2003 |
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This is very well written, exceptionally, even, compared to many a story posted on BDSM library. The author has excellent command of language and is particularly good at dialogues/ monologues that look deceptively simple and raw but are well thought out and effective. The characters may not be the deepest fictional people ever but they aren't just cardboard cutouts. The two main male characters are monsters but well explained, well described monsters. The fact that they crack viscious jokes from time to time helps detract somewhat from the overall grim tone of the story. What the author should be really appreciated for is the effort that was put into making female characters be not just exploited objects but participants of the ordeals. They are not just raped or simply forced to perform, the real strength here lies in the fact that they are manipulated into becoming willing participants of their own exploitation, that they are left no choice but to initiate and encourage their own degradation. They are completely and utterly dominated into absolute submission where they deny their own ego. A lot of stories here miss that part and the author got it perfectly.
That said, the first part still seems to be the strongest. Obviously, it has the strength of surprise working to its advantage and, cruel as it is, it's not the simple cruelty that makes it stand above most stories on this fine site, but the finely tuned combination of blackmail, humilitation and persuasion that makes actual physical violence just the proverbial icing on the cake.
The latter parts predictably have to work hard to reach the level of intensity set extremely high by the first part so they go down the obvious path of more violence, more degradation, more exploitation, bestiality, snuff and the like. It is extreme, yes, but naturally doesn't have the same sharp focus of the first part. However, it will probably work well for those who are interested in reading about practically every thing imaginable done to human body in a broadly sexual context. What is encouraging is that the fourth part does away with actual physical violence for the most part and focuses on mind-control which proves that the author is aware of the perils of every subsequent chapter trying to outhardcore the previous one.
The codes need to be updated as well, but the author has to be credited for placing a fair warning before the part where the ugliness is taken to a whole new level.
It is also true that the story grows increasingly less believable after the first part is over. Not just in the department of training of the daughters, which is understandably the hardest one to pull off, but in some dialogues and situations as well. The sole repetition of certain situations and reactions also drags the tempo down a bit. However, since this is essentially just Internet pornography, this is not such a huge problem as it would be were the ambitions of the story broader. The storyline is focused on one violent sexual act after another and it would be good to see some kind of structure (more about motivation, interaction with the rest of the society, questioning the values, motives, plans), some kind of broader picture, some kind of conclusion. That would move the story to another level altogether.
All in all, the strength of this story is in its ability to be exciting and repulsive at the same time, making the readers actually rehtink their takes on sex, domination, power, submission, violence, free will and the like. It will be interesting reading twhat the author will come up in future chapters. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
wontworry
(Edit) (Sep 16, 2003)
- What can I say ... Thank you.
I agree with the criticsms as well as the praise. I'll try harder with the next one !!
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slavelucy
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Sep 4, 2003 |
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i really liked this story, thought is was well written and constructed and the content was hot! The only thing that didn't appeal to me was the repeated mentioning of the 7 year old child, but having said that i suppose the main character would'nt have gone along with the whole thing if it wasn't for her kids so i guess it's ok as long as they never actually come into the story.<br>Hope to read more soon! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Sep 1, 2003 |
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Not much background or justification for what's happening, but the major heat that is generated easily overcomes this minor quibble. Looking forward to more fun and games in the subsequent chapters. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Maserati
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Aug 31, 2003 |
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Doesn't click for me. The actors in it are just that - not real people. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
wontworry
(Edit) (Aug 31, 2003)
- Each to his own. I recommend you read Maserati's other reviews (just click on the links) to understand his reasoning.
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| Reviewer:
woolfighter
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Aug 28, 2003 |
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I love the psico-drama inside her head. Well written. Don't keep us waiting. (9/10)
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mkemse
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Aug 27, 2003 |
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If I could rate it higher I would
GREAT!!!!! Can't wair for more to be posted (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
stevedema
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Aug 25, 2003 |
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I enjoyed it very much. Please continue (7/10)
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