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Rancho Paloma Blanca
Author: Estaban Bacca
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(Added on Apr 15, 2004)
(This month 123309 readers) (Total 191112 readers) |
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The adventures of an international slave trader. This segment set in Mexico and Guatemala. Opens with the capture of a mother and daughter who are on vacation in the Yucatan Penninsula. Relates their conditioning as slaves and their eventual sale to a wealthy client. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
| Average
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| Reviewer:
littleslut
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Jun 18, 2004 |
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a wonderful story that just keeps getting better and better! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 18, 2004 |
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wish it could be rated higher, this is my type of story, and genere, hope there is much more to come (10/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 18, 2004)
- Thank you for a kind review
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| Reviewer:
EngineX
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Jun 16, 2004 |
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The latest segment about the 2nd capture is the best yet in this story. I like the attention paid to the details of the kidnap which adds a dimension of realism, anticipation and erotic tension which works very well... (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 17, 2004)
- Thank you for taking the time to comment on this story - E
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Jun 2, 2004 |
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Good story. We thought the pace was quite good, enough details without getting bogged down. We also enjoy the switching of the points of view. We look forward to the next segments. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- thank you for reviewing
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| Reviewer:
MoMnDaD
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May 15, 2004 |
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We find this work extremely well paced. The action moves from one heroine to the other and back. We are looking forward to the next predicaments and indignities. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- Thank you for reviewing
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| Reviewer:
MicrowaveOven
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May 15, 2004 |
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Great storyline, though the story itself a bit too fastpaced for my liking. I'm looking forward to the next chapters in this story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (May 31, 2004)
- Thank you for taking the time to review. I am glad you find the theme interesting.
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| Reviewer:
Luzifer
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May 13, 2004 |
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great stuff!!
I really like it and am longing for further parts (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- Thank you for reviewing
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Apr 20, 2004 |
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OK now, 1623 words is a chapter now. You managed to set up the characters, capture them, strip one of them in 1623 words. You should have them broken in, sold in another 1500 words.
(5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Tom Wilson
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Apr 19, 2004 |
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Chapter one is a blistering start for this story. The author has his slave trader working slowly to condition his new aquisitions into slave life. I can't wait for chapter two. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- Thank you for reviewing
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| Reviewer:
peachers
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Apr 16, 2004 |
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GOOD BUT BELEIVE AS MOGGY POINTED OUT IN THIER REVIEW HURRIED
STILL I WILL BE KEPTING A LOOK OUT FOR MORE
GOOD JOB MORE PLEASE (7/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- Thank you for reviewing
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Apr 15, 2004 |
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A good start, if rather short. I thought the writing was capable and engaging, but too hurried. This material could have easily been stretched to three times the length and still kept the reader's attention. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
- thank you for reviewing
- Replied by:
EstabanBacca
(Edit) (Jun 8, 2004)
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