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You are a Slut, Justine
Author: Dom Master
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(Added on May 13, 2004)
(This month 97831 readers) (Total 144752 readers) |
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Taken by force, Justine's innermost fantasys are realized as she becomes the whore she is truely meant to be. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
(Edit) |
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Apr 22, 2005 |
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. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Aug 25, 2007)
- Your feedback really helped. I'll keep it in mind for my next story.
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| Reviewer:
MistressKali
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May 23, 2004 |
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the third person got a little old, but all in all a good story. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (May 24, 2004)
- Thank you for reviewing my story. I think the jury is in on the perspective - 2nd person is not good. My next story will be from the 3rd person narrative.
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MistressKali
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2004)
- heck, We all make mistakes.. as You can see by Mine (writing third when I meant second person) Don't let the reviews get You down.. it takes a lot to put a piece of Yourself on display and anyone who does deserves some credit just for that.
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| Reviewer:
sm4hg
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May 16, 2004 |
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I must admit I personaly do not like the second-person-style. Just because I'm not able to identify myself with a woman. ;) apart from that I'd say the story itself is well written. Keep on writing! (6/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks for your input.
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| Reviewer:
bambipaige
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May 15, 2004 |
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I just had to add a review - the other ones are so unjustifiably bad. The use of second person was unusually well done and the story was very well written. I'm not getting the "everything's cliche" thing and I really enjoyed this story. The action's quick, dirty, and descriptive and the girl this was written for is very lucky, I think :). (8/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thank you Bambi. Email me with some ideas, and I can write something for you.
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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May 14, 2004 |
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If you are into sex and violence by the numbers, this is the story for you. It also contains almost every cliche' in the book, but who's counting. The writing is clean and basically free of distractions. The choice of tense was not anything insurmountable to this reader, but it takes all kinds I guess. The author is encouraged to continue to work on his craft, try to come up with one or two things original (but also possible), next time round and to not be discouraged by some of the off the wall criticisms his work may generate. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (May 15, 2004)
- For your information I have ten (10) stories posted on this site.
- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks for your input. I guess the saying "You can't please everyone" certainly holds true. I "lost points" on Susan's Plight for trying to be original. Now I'm dinged for being too cliche'. Oh well, my stories are for me. If you enjoy them too, great. By the way, I looked for your stories, and what do you know, there aren't any... I'll look again. I see that you have reviewed many stories, so I'm interested in what you would consider "original". Again, thanks.
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| Reviewer:
banderson
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May 14, 2004 |
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Frankly, I don't know if this is a good story or not -- I couldn't read past the 3rd graph because it's in SECOND PERSON. Please, folks, don't use 2nd person! It's annoying. Use first or third person only. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (May 14, 2004)
- If you couldn't take the time to read it, you don't have the right to review it. Hell, you had to abbreviate paragraph. Do you have ADD? To be honest, I don't necessarily prefer 2nd person perspective either, but it shouldn't distract from the story. I wrote this story for a specific person, which is why I used 2nd person.
As for your demands that things be done YOUR way - FUCK YOU!
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