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Jade\'s first odysessy
Author: Bastet
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(Added on Feb 17, 2006)
(This month 51370 readers) (Total 58970 readers) |
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Jade\'s a stuck up solitary girl that finally attains the things she won\'t admit she deeply desires. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (5.5/10) |
Average
Rating: (5.5/10) |
Highest
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Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Feb 20, 2006 |
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This is the final paragraph: ------------------------------------------------ Aidan ignore my nonsense, and began to read with fascinating vitality. I sat on the bed in paralyzing awe. a slight luminesence over one hemisphere of his face from the glow of the computer screen, while I embraced my words beating with life and oxygen, he gave birth to a mute, and interperted it with a dialect and sound I would have never imaged. ---------------------------------------------- If you like this kind of pretentious, self-indulgent stuff, then by all means read the story. I think it needs an intelligent and independent editor, but it doesn't seem to have even been proof-read -- and certainly wasn't spell-checked. It is so "subtle" in parts that it is incomprehensible. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
1nkbloT
(Edit) (Feb 20, 2006)
- It sounds you may be a tad pretentious and self-indulgent aswell from your former responses.
Unfortunately people are entitled to their own opinions. I give you a 2/10.
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Reviewer:
jip
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Feb 20, 2006 |
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I gave temporary a 5 as it is only a rather long introduction. Will review this when there is the rest. It's looks promising.... (5/10)
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Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Feb 17, 2006 |
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An interesting character sketch of a complex but quite believable young lady. Any BDSM in the story might be a little bit subtle for this site but well written (8/10)
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- Replied by:
1nkbloT
(Edit) (Feb 18, 2006)
- Thank you, I'm very much just still in the body of the story, It isn't complete. I'm very creative in actual acts of BDSM - and I think the build up and atmosphere are absolutely the most important parts, and i'm proud of what i've written, Wrapping it all up has always slightly been a problem for me. But Thank you for your feedback!
It was my first, but it won't be my last - Check back!
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