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Birthday slut
Author: LV Hangman
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(Added on Aug 27, 2001)
(This month 54027 readers) (Total 77384 readers) |
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Short story. For his birthday he wanted to be taken by his Wife. To watch her climb into a strap-on and take his virgin ass. Well today was his day and his gifts were about to be delivered. Read his transformation from male to slut! |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Escritor
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Feb 9, 2009 |
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Despite agreeing with some of the other reviewers (you need to describe a little more the actions and reactions of the characters), I think the story was good. And I think it deserves a better rating than most of the reviewers have given. Since this story was written so long ago, asking for more seems like a futil effort, but I'd still like to state I'd like to read some more :) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
usemehrd
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May 18, 2008 |
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I liked it, it's always great when someone you love takes control.Should have been longer. (7/10)
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jip
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Jan 4, 2007 |
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Not bad at all, but some more details and variation would make it better. The story is written in 2001. Where there more birthdays??? (7/10)
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oddball
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Dec 6, 2004 |
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Need to flesh it out. Great idea, especially the stool! (5/10)
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D. Atrocity
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Jul 19, 2004 |
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Not bad. I hope you chose to elaborate on this person's life and that of his wife, though. Try telling the details of the characters' emotions a little more in depth. That should help. By the way, thank you for writing some femdom. There's not enough of that stuff in the world. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
le forgeron
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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The introduction is too fast,
the story need more pace.
It really sound like a factual report, missing all the feelings and psychological states.
Beginning the story a few days/months before the events, as well as developping the plot could really improve it. (4/10)
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Nitrofox
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Jun 1, 2003 |
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This is a pretty decent story. What it lacks is length, and a decent plot. You practically know exactly what's going to happen just from the description. The action is not particularly intense, and it is far too short. This story needs lengthening, as well as more plot development. (4/10)
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