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Juanita\'s Story
Author: ynyn
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(Added on Oct 13, 2006)
(This month 11493 readers) (Total 26994 readers) |
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een takes money from thugs, and they take out vengeance on his girfriend and sister. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Oct 16, 2006 |
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Needs some work, and a better ending. Such as the three kidnappers being killed in a police shootout. (6/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Oct 14, 2006 |
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Just from my viewpoint, a story about a 13 year old girl is in pedo-land and should not be posted here, but ... just my opinion. Sadly, your writing skills are not so good. You leave words out of sentences and you have numerous typos and your grammar is wrong in several places. (6/10)
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Curtis
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Oct 14, 2006 |
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Not a bad story, but it should end with the three kids taking the note to the police and the bad guys spending the next five to ten in lockup. I can't think of any reason why they wouldn't. (7/10)
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