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Freshman Year Girlfriend
Author: Underdog
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(Added on Jan 19, 2007)
(This month 125316 readers) (Total 183875 readers) |
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I\'d always had strong submissive fantasies, but had never had a chance to act them out until I met my freshman year girlfriend. She seemed shy and a bit strange when we met, but turned out to be wildly inventive and creative as her femdom over me got more intense and extreme. This first part has little sex, but future installments will have much. |
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| Reviewer:
budick
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Feb 6, 2007 |
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This is one of the best, if not the best, femdom story I have read on the web. It has an air of reality, even though portions of the story are quite extreme. Jacqueline’s transformation, from a naive 18 year old college freshman to an extremely inventive and cruel domme, is amazing. I hope there will be further installments and look forward to reading them. (10/10)
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trainmanretep
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Feb 5, 2007 |
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Well written story and interesting concept. I've now read the sequels. While they are a bit extreme for my taste in their actions, still great writing (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
multikingcrimson
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Jan 29, 2007 |
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I more or less agree with azrlq17, but I think both chapters are really really good, just the first is better than the second. It is one of the best stories I have read in my life, and I hope the saga of Jackie and her slave continues. I am willing to read the extreme things that her will do to him just for her own pleasure.
Congratulations for such a good story. Also Mall princess was very very good. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Jan 28, 2007 |
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Well I liked the 1st chapter. But the 2nd really sucked.
What was a fun journey for both discovering what they liked became a stringent training course. What dominant woman would let her mother come and take over like this? What fun is there in discovering what you like and what rules your slave should follow if your mom comes in and basically tells you what to do? Is there really any dominant person who would let someone else decide whether you can live with your slave or not? To let her mom decide what is the proper way of serving her? Dominant persons usually cut the umbilical cord sooner rather than later. She should just have kicked her out. While before Jackie had no problem of torturing him she gets so insecure in front of her mom and asked really stupid questions like how to punish him. I stopped reading at that place.
Both the first and the second chapter up to the point I stopped reading had good grammar and spelling.
While I give this a 6 the 1st chapter gets an 8 or 9 while the 2nd a 4. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Worthless
(Edit) (Jan 30, 2007)
- Good feedback, but I see Jackie as a novice who's just discovered both the missing element in her life (having a slave) and that her mother has been a dominant all along. So, the mother exerts her dominance a bit, and then lets the couple go free, as I plan in the future. The next chapter is all about Jackie taking over.
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Saint Thorn
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Jan 27, 2007 |
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Great work. Wonderfully dark imagination and writing. (10/10)
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underherthumb
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Jan 23, 2007 |
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One of the Best stories I have EVER read. THe dialogue and characters are totally believable. And the spelling and grammar are correct, too (EXTREMELY rare too often!). I am looking forward to the future installments (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Worthless
(Edit) (Jan 25, 2007)
- Thanks, all... I added an update should be posted soon...
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| Reviewer:
coldice
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Jan 21, 2007 |
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Very much liked reading this story. Hope you continue it. I had a girlfriend somewhat like this (but not anywhere as extreme). She went to some psyc place too =S.
The writing style was good and readable and it flows pretty good too. Happy Writing. (9/10)
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loserslave01
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Jan 20, 2007 |
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Such an amazing story, after reading I immediately checked to see what other stories the author had written wanting to read more. Only then I realized this is the same guy who wrote my other favorite story about the mall princess! Exactly what I like in a story.. and what I secretly hope for in a Mistress. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Worthless
(Edit) (Jan 20, 2007)
- Thanks... I love the feedback!
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