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Taylor\'s Spanked WhaledTail & Butt Plug Tailed
Author: CarolinaSpanker
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(Added on Jan 21, 2007)
(This month 75230 readers) (Total 111673 readers) |
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The best fantasy stories are the ones with a kerenel of truth. As you will see the eighteen year old school student admits by her email address and the hard spank her boyfriend gives her when she seductivly raises the back of her shorts and he pops her bare skin hard! |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jan 23, 2007 |
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I think some people have gotten a bit carried away with their reviews of this particular piece. It's not true that the author is under age or cannot speak the language. I've had two of my stories reviewed by him and his prose was lucid but strangely biased towards spanking to the exclusion of everything else. I know it's a slow week at the old BSDM Library, but cut this guy some slack,and show a little tenderness. Try remembering that this is a niche piece at best, probably because no one has met his rather strange standards. Onthat happy note I'll go back to scribbling (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Jan 23, 2007 |
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A poorly told story, with few demonstrated writing skills. You might do well to A) get an English-speaking editor to help you learn a few writing skills and B) start over, after a thorough revision. Good luck! (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jan 22, 2007 |
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I gave this a try, despite the description, which was poorly put. However, the story was...well, it was not good. Technically this is a train wreck. Run on sentences, misplaced capitalizations, misplaced words, typos, etc. run rampant. In other words, to get the gist you have to trace over the lines a few times. The technical errors lead to this story reading as if it were written by a child. This was not helped by the story itself, which was bland and unimaginative, at best.
I've a suspision that this story was submitted by a child or a young non-native English speaker. If the latter is the case I would recommend trying your hand at writing in your native tongue. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
kinkcrazy
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Jan 21, 2007 |
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third grade writing (4/10)
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