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The Beginning
Author: Mickey Deal
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(Added on May 24, 2007)
(This month 8069 readers) (Total 14975 readers) |
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simply a Master taking a slave.... |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 31, 2007 |
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simple storyline good story (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
butterflySlave4u
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May 29, 2007 |
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it was wonderful....just as I've always thought a collaring preparation should be.... (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
arabella
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May 25, 2007 |
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I guess I am just fussy since some seem to have liked this story. But it seemed rather tired and predictable. And I really do not much like the formate of "you feel this and that", but that of course is a personal opinion. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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May 25, 2007 |
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Interesting, intense , and insightful.
You tell the story well though toward the middle you devolve into an experimental formating which I personally don't feel adds to the telling, or eases the readers understanding. I suspect it would work better if used very sparingly. The story itself is marvelous.
p.s. whelp is a small child welt is what the kiss of leather leaves (9/10)
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