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Man's Best Friend
Author: Nancy~
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(Added on Aug 3, 2007)
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A dominant man arranges for his submissive girlfriend to visit a kennel where she is introduced to K-9 love in a forceful way. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
SimonMagick
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Dec 11, 2007 |
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Carol's reactions to her situation are so authenically female I have to believe writer Nancy is one as well.
What really makes the story believable on a deep level is the degree to which the submissive has control. She uses her safeword, and it is respected. And the Doms reactions are of a type often missing from SM yarns. Here they manipulate her into subjecting herself to yet another humiliation.
I gave it 10, because it is first rate. The author manages to be over-the-top while adding autheniticy. No easy trick in this genre. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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Aug 8, 2007 |
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Very Nicely done, especially for a first submission. Character development is always the hardest, but most important part, in order to draw the reader into the story and develop a personal connection. Your descriptions are detailed enough to indicate that you can develop the characters with some concentration. It's also difficult to separate an unpleasant situation from one's personal space without using an unpleasant character as a buffer. While she dosen't necessarily deserve such a jerk as a master; in real life such jerks do exist and many women are attracted to them due to their own insecurities. Building on these concepts can flesh out the individuals and add depth to the story. Keep at it! The subject is somewhat neglected here and can use refreshing. Keep the stories coming! Writing encourages more writing. I encourage you to keep going. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
nancy
(Edit) (Aug 9, 2007)
- Thank you for the kind words, Snark, and I appreciate the constructive criticism. If I were starting over with the helpful comments I have received here, I think it would be a better story.
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| Reviewer:
tiffy
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Aug 8, 2007 |
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I first of all just have to say thank you for writing this!!!! There are hardly any bestiality stories out there and although I ve never fd my dog its defintly a fantasy and turn me on, the story defintly has promise I was a bit confues on the characters and you maybe add a bit more...but thank you I hope more to come!! (5/10)
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- Replied by:
nancy
(Edit) (Aug 8, 2007)
- Thank you, tiffy, for the kind words. Actually I am not into dogs either, but for some reason the humiliation of it done in this forced way was a great fantasy for me, and I enjoyed writing it.
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Night Writer
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Aug 5, 2007 |
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I sense the beginnings of a very good writer here. That said, I'd like to see more character development, and couldn't believe this girl would partner with such a lout. Who are these people, and why are they together? What are their redeeming qualities? There were a few technical glitches, but not enough to give me indigestion. Still, there's something underneath I like here. I'll be looking forward to your progress. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
nancy
(Edit) (Aug 5, 2007)
- Thank you for the helpful comments. I am trying to get into the Writer's Block Forum, and hope to work on character development. I know that is important, but have trouble doing it.
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Aug 5, 2007 |
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As a first effort this was very solid. Unfortunately, the story was told in an almost clinical fashion that allowed for little emoptional investment. I didn't are about the girl and I didn't like her master. The additional characters, other than the kennle owner, were crass, unlikable and rude - their behavior seemed entirely out of place. This was another reason I failed to get into the story. With a little work, and a few more stories under the belt, this author could wind up telling some very good stories.
**Nancy, check out the Writer's Block in the forums. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
nancy
(Edit) (Aug 5, 2007)
- Thank you for the helpful comments, Mr. Dean. I know I need to work on character development, which I find difficult. When writing I was so identified with the humiliation felt by Carol that I made the other characters crass, unlikable and rude to intensify this feeling. I probably overdid that a bit.
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| Reviewer:
Pussycat Sam
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Aug 4, 2007 |
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Great start, will look forward to more!! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Aug 3, 2007 |
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Very nicely written story, but I could not like her Master at all! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nancy
(Edit) (Aug 3, 2007)
- Thank you for the nice review. I do not like her Master very much either because I identify with Carol, but he was necessary to get her into this predicament.
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nancy
(Edit) (Aug 4, 2007)
- Thank you for the nice review. I do not like her Master very much either because I identify with Carol, but he was necessary to get her into this predicament.
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