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Bonnie - Her Brother\'s Slave - Volume II
Author: Lewis Chappelle
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(Added on Feb 7, 2008)
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The multi-part Volume is a sequal to a previous piece by the same title. A young girl enjoys the domination of her older brother as her Mother enjoys the domination of her husband. Other young and vulnerable girls are kidnapped to join the family compound dedicated to the kinky pleasures of the men. |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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not up to par with most of your but good (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lancer
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Feb 8, 2008 |
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You need to get into details giving your characters a personality and emotions.Where is the fear or delight they feel and what about the description? (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Lewis_Chappelle
(Edit) (Feb 9, 2008)
- Lancer; I haven't written a reply to a review until now and I do so not to take umbridge with you right to critique my work but to make tow points regarding your review: 1) There is an Author's Note at the beginning of my story which states that personality of the characters in Volume II was to be found in Volume I of the story published earlier. 2) As to the details of the feelings of the characters I refer you to paragraphs 2, 5, 8 , and 9 of Chapter #1 and paragraphs 7, 8, 10, 11, 12, 13 and 27 of Chapter #2.
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