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The Submissive Schoolgirl
Author: Shanks
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(Added on Jul 7, 2008)
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Amy was a shy and unpopular girl with a secret past of being dominated by her former tutor. She finally confides in someone who wants nothing but to continue to dominate her. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
DominantHacker
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Nov 12, 2008 |
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Very enjoyable. Very good pace, good approach. I hope more comes soon. (8/10)
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theroadtoad
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Aug 14, 2008 |
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I agree with the previous reviewers. Write more! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 20, 2008 |
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good start, i will be intrested to see where it leads to (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
thecollectorii
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Jul 18, 2008 |
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an intersting start I look forward to more to come (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
ukMasterC
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Jul 17, 2008 |
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Well written - could have done with being longer. Look forward to reading more about amy and more of your work. (8/10)
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blossom
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Jul 14, 2008 |
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interesting story line, could be possible to get a few twists in, like getting one over on the other boy who started the bet (5/10)
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rocket71
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Jul 14, 2008 |
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Could be a good story with more chapters. (7/10)
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Jul 13, 2008 |
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Decent premise, but like many authors here you need to learn the difference between "showing" and "telling". TELLING the reader that Charlie's parents are rich isn't as interesting as DEMONSTRATING that they're rich ... which could be accomplished fairly simply. The lengthy exposition by Amy about her tutor was boring as hell and didn't sound like a teenager talking at all. It sounded like the author doing exposition. (6/10)
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