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The Ship's Pleasure
Author: Edward Wagner
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(Added on Dec 20, 2009)
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I was 18 years old and was drugged and taken to a dungeon to suffer the intense humiliating sexual training to become a slave on board of a ship that spent 6 to 8 months at sea and needed sexual reliefe for it's crew. |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Dec 7, 2010 |
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Who cares about sexual relief? A crew that spends 6 to 8 months at sea is much earlier gonna need some food. By the time they're desperate for a fuck there's probably no-one left to bang as they all died of starvation.
Syntax, grammar and about everything else go overboard the minute this ship sets sail. Nice try, as the story has potential, but things are rather surrealistically chaotic, I'm afraid...
JJ (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
john0850
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Jan 9, 2010 |
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Good story. Needs editing, etc. as reviewers before me have written. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Gordi
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Dec 30, 2009 |
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See how many periods you can find!
"Between occasional moaning and stager breathing the Master went on; On board the ship you are going to serve, most of the men are not gay so, we had to make the male body's of the slaves appealing sexually to them so we cover them with rubber which works great so, your transformation was one of the best so far but they will decide how they want you, to start with you will be in rubber at all times, starting now he will dress you and then we will have another shooting in the set rooooommmm,,, yes , yesssss, and he exploded in the condom leaving the softening organ in my mouth I did not move but just kept sucking very slowly and lightly, he kept his head back with his eyes closed for about ten minutes and his organ started reacting again and I went to work on it all over again." (2/10)
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Seji
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Dec 30, 2009 |
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I couldn't read this. It made my eyes bleed. Ask for help with your grammar, spelling and punctuation next time.
The story line sounded quite interesting but being unreadable, I can not offer more than that. Good luck! (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Dec 27, 2009 |
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Unreadable. try short 4/5 line paragraphs,double line spaced not indented,and one speaker per paragraph, there seems to be some promise here but its so difficult to read blocks of text (5/10)
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kimmi
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Dec 27, 2009 |
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You would have gotten an 8 if it was edited by someone who understands grammar. Try some paragraphs, your spelling and choice of words is poor. (5/10)
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