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House of Singing Wind
Author: Sir Marc Wyld
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(Added on Dec 20, 2009)
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A reporter gains acess to a private training academy for slaves. |
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| Reviewer:
CarolinaSpanker
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Mar 1, 2011 |
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I enjoyed the read, but wished the spanking, or as was mentioned in the story ass bruised had been fleshed out. (7/10)
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JimmyJump
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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Good story, very well written. A lot of aggravating errors though. The kind of errors that reek of sloppyness. A few odd choices of synonyms too, like "acclimate" instead of the more known "acclimatize".
I had a hard time, figure of speech, with the Vietnam interludes. Too close to a certain reality for comfort. Of course, it helps situate some background, but still.
I've never been one to detract 'points' because of sloppy grammar, but here it keeps me from giving a perfect ten. Why? Because I feel that an author who writes *this* good, ows it to himself to keep his writing tidy and clean and shouldn't allow himself to let errors detract from the quality of the piece.
What also bothered me a tad, is that again we have a woman who is pre-fabricated with only one thought; that of succombing. Instead of an investigative journalist, we've got ourselves a woman who's sole intention is to let herself be trained, not to win a Pulizer with the forthcoming articles, but because the author made her a masochist.
Mostly this is done because a willing subject is easier to write about than one who doesn't want to give in.
Anyway, like I said, the writing is extremely good. And the story is too. Mostly.
JJ
Replied by SirMarc (Jul 21, 2010)
Thank you for the generous critisism that I fully agree with except for the prefabricated reporter. The next few chapters should flesh her character out.
Again, I appreciate the technical critisism as well. I've tried to be better at self editing as in a reread, I do sound quite dyslexic sometimes. My apologies since right now, without an editor, I actually see what hes sees and his assistant is very easy on me: she just fixes my screwups and never sends me editied versions or marked copy. This time, tyring erotica, I have you, the readers, to keep me honest. Thanks for your support as I would truly love to perfect this craft; I can use the money and it seems easier than driving a truck. I digress. Sir Marc July 21, 2010
Replied by SirMarc (Jul 21, 2010)
One more thing, bro. I needed the war steer the story and rule one, write what you know figured in. Marc the dude says sorry about the bad trip down memory lane. Marc the writer secretly rejoices that it's good enough to evoke emotion. Let me quote and add at the same time. With all due respect Mr. Grant, you should of said: "War is hell, but it's who we are." So, with that rant out of the way, JJ, the historical fiction buck stops here and I hope you enjoy the rest of the tale.
Replied by JimmyJump (Jul 21, 2010)
I agree on the Vietnam thing. Besides, It's not because I feel a tad uneasy about it that I don't like it. It is part of the story. Maybe even that without the 'Nam backdrop, the story wouldn't exist, or at least would lose its appeal and/or reason of being.
Thanks for taking your time to reply, Sir Marc.
I'll be following your stories...
JJ (9/10)
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Satan_Klaus
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Feb 25, 2010 |
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I love this story! It is pure poetry! Perfect flow and enchanting descriptions!
The only reasons why I don't give a ten are technical. The story could use better formatting and a little editing. Sometimes you slip from past to present in a single paragraph. Occasionally, you are missing a word or have one too many in a sentence. (9/10)
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kemosabe
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Jan 21, 2010 |
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Extremely well written. Reminds me somewhat of a story published years ago where a gunslinger provided unsuspecting American women (sometimes flight attendants, etc.) to a whore house in Bangkoc. Holds your interest superbly and surpasses the phrasing in 90% of the stories in this site Well done! (10/10)
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Dea Menrfa
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Dec 27, 2009 |
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I am looking forward to reading much, much more of this story. (10/10)
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masterdw
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Dec 27, 2009 |
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I am most anxious for further parts in what I think might become an epic. Very good start. Holds interest as a story. (10/10)
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Jaymin01
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Dec 25, 2009 |
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Liked this story, think it is very, very good, and could be a very good long story. Looking forward to seeing what else the author has planned for this story (8/10)
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