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The Proposal
Author: Subsuzan
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(Added on Nov 23, 2011)
(This month 84203 readers) (Total 131542 readers) |
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Megin is offered by her boss a very interesting position as a facilitator for the company. She ends up becoming forced into the postion through her own bad decision and quickly becomes the corporations whore. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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5909981
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Jun 17, 2012 |
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loved how it made sense and how subject accepts its place .. also liked how the trap is closed by making it seem its subjects fault... seemed a bit low in humiliation but it would come in latter parts story development was good keep writing :)
(9/10)
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Cumplete Cuntrol
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May 17, 2012 |
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I enjoyed the development of Dan's character from somewhat of an underling Exec, puffed up on Corporate success, into a soulless sadist who blithely uses extortion of blackmail to coerce others into doing his will. The niece was a nice touch. Could use a bit more of an editorial eye, if you know someone gifted with that sort of thing. Thanks for the read! (9/10)
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aweta69
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Dec 11, 2011 |
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Good story for a rainy day. I like the flow and the progression pace. Looking forward for the next instalment. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks for the kind words.
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Dec 10, 2011 |
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Reminds me of an earlier posting; "Whore 94". Would have gotten a 10 if the author had run it through a grammer test. Anxious to see where the author is taking this plot. Seems to be a dead-end situation. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- I read the story you referred too and I found it to be really unrealistic. You have written some great reviews. I appreciate your kind words. I hope that the future installments surprise you. I agree the grammar was horrible. I will work on it in the future.
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| Reviewer:
urdbm
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Dec 9, 2011 |
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very good, great beginning! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks! :)
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| Reviewer:
femd0ml0ver
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Nov 26, 2011 |
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Although not exactly my kink, extremely well written and a joy to read. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks. Read more in the future I think you might find it more to your liking! ;)
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mtnmstr
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Nov 25, 2011 |
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very good, keep it going (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks! I will!
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| Reviewer:
bkmasta
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Nov 25, 2011 |
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Very good start please continue, is this how you wish to be treated (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks for your compliment. No, I would not want to be treated like this. Fantasy and reality for me are two different things. I think many women have fantasies that are extreme but they would never act upon them just because it's not what they really want. It's just fantasy.
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JimmyJump
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Nov 23, 2011 |
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Besides lots of omitted words -the occasional note to oneself and massacrated sentences, "The Proposal" is decently written and a very good read.
First story on the Library from Subsuzan and hopefully not the last one.
One to follow. Or two -both the story and the author...
JJ (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Subsuzan
(Edit) (May 6, 2012)
- Thanks, I had to look up massacrated. LOL. I appreciate your review. I did work on the grammar on my next part. I hope you enjoy it. Please feel free to send me any errors that you see. I ran this by another reader hoping to catch them all. I get so focused on context that I get overwhelmed and overlook some basic grammar issues. Again thank you for your very nice review.
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