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Symon and Louise
Author: Nikki
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(Added on Nov 30, 2002)
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The Wilkinsons had always been a very close family, but Symon decides the time has come to get to know his baby sister just a little bit better. |
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Jan 1, 2003 |
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I loved the new chapter, can't wait to see what Mr. Jones is going to do to Little Lousie. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Powerone
(Edit) (Jun 16, 2003)
- Loved the new chapter. Poor Louise was left so unfulfilled, but maybe Mr. Jones can help that.
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Powerone
(Edit) (Jun 16, 2003)
- Loved the new chapter. Poor Louise was left so unfulfilled, but maybe Mr. Jones can help that.
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Dec 1, 2002 |
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I liked this story. I like incest, but I do agree that 12 certainly does not fall into the "Teen" category. Also, nikki, what did you mean "she's thirteen tomorrow"? This is based on a real person? Anyways, I enjoyed it, but I thought it could have been longer. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
nikki
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2002)
- Thanks, Glad you liked. I simply meant that 'Louise' is very close to being a teen, this story is not meant to be paedophelia.The story is based on real events, which took place quite some time ago.
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Dec 1, 2002 |
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I'm not sure where the line is between 'paedophilia' and 'teen' - but I think I would put twelve into the former category. But that's a close call.
The author uses words well, but there are too many lonnng run-on sentences (see paragraph four and paragraph six); those (and some others) could easily be whittled down into more manageable thought bites. Thirty minutes of such re-work would enhance the story considerably. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
nikki
(Edit) (Dec 1, 2002)
- she's thirteen tomorrow ;-)
ok, so i waffled in places, you're right...When i've managed to scrape what's left of my self-esteem off the floor, i may have a go at a re-write. Thanks for your comments though, really!
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| Reviewer:
luc
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Nov 30, 2002 |
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Pretty lamo- and gods! i love incest!!! But this story doesn't do it any justice. Perhaps the author could take it down for a rewrite? (3/10)
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- Replied by:
nikki
(Edit) (Dec 1, 2002)
- Thank you for taking the time to review, it wasn't my intention to do an injustice to incest! I'm sorry you didn't enjoy the story, but I'm not sure that you would find it any less lame if I re-wrote it. Nikki
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