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The Servant of Two Masters?
Author: Fidelis Blue
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(Added on Sep 7, 2003)
(This month 48887 readers) (Total 52712 readers) |
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He meets a woman who is controlled by her master. She is beaten for having sex with him, but despite his misgivings she persists. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (7/10) |
Average
Rating: (7.5/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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Reviewer:
Emily
(Edit) |
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Sep 24, 2003 |
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Interesting dialogue. It presents itself as almost a screenplay. I am not sure I understand all the single quotation marks. It needs some work but much talent in the dialogue area. (6/10)
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Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Sep 15, 2003 |
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As with the other reviewers I feel that this is an excellent story that lacks that certain something to put it over the edge to greatness. Certainly the eroticism could be jacked up a little bit by increasing the color and detail. Similarly, the story could have been improved by having the "green eyed lady" recount in detail one of her chastisement sessions at the hands of her unnamed master. I liked the ending because it left one up in the air concerning her now former master. For an example of what may be this author's best story read "A Lesson In Manners". (8/10)
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Reviewer:
padagat
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Sep 9, 2003 |
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it's good but have hanging end. didn't finish the story well. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
fidelis
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2003)
- Well, sometimes I like to finish on a note of suspense rather than answering all the questions. But if you don't think it works, maybe I should reconsider. Anyway, thanks for your comment.
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 8, 2003 |
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Wonder how this would have come out as a non-consent story, maybe a little blackmail as well (9/10)
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