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Pentonbridge Pig
Author: Jason Negus
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(Added on Apr 22, 2004)
(This month 3 readers) (Total 66157 readers) |
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The story of one woman's prison sentence in a very special penitentiary. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
littleone_
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Dec 15, 2009 |
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It is the best "Prison" story every written, but it just stops and has no ending. As it has been several years since a new chapter was written I doubt it ever will have an ending. Too bad it could be a great story. (5/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 24, 2009 |
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This has been sitting on my Shelf for over two years now, so I'd better get to a review.
I can only say one thing about this story, actually, two things.
One, it's the best female prison-based story I have ever encountered, with scenes veering from the incredibly erotic to the most vile sadistic deeds. One thing that makes this story stand out, is the wonderful painting of the main character, Emily, who's inner musings are so deliciously depicted it makes her sound like Alice In Wonderland, exept that the natives aren't that friendly.
Second thing I wanted to say, is that it is a damn shame that this here story was never finished... but one never knows, maybe one day we'll get lucky.
JJ (10/10)
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Samantha
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Jan 22, 2006 |
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What makes this story so enjoyable? First of all, something that is a must for any author; punctuation, grammer and formatting are of a very high standard. Well done :) What I Love about the content of this story is the focus the author has on the internal dialogue of the Prisoner and the changes to the prisoners state of mind as she progresses through the trials and tribulations of her new Prison Life. Can't wait to read the next chapters. (10/10)
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nikita
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Oct 27, 2005 |
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What a wonderfully cryptic story and very well written. I'd have to agree with rest of the reviewers and give you ten well deserved oinks...let's see...in Hawg Holler, they say ...uh... well..I DON'T know what the say...but here's to pork and beer... (10/10)
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La Toya
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Mar 25, 2005 |
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GREAT STORY!!, Iam sorry to see the writer as not added to this story in a while. One can hope it will soon have more chapters (9/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Aug 7, 2005)
- Thank you very much for letting me know ho you feel La Toya. I have been away a long time and for that I must apologise to everyone who read this story and enjoyed it and has waited for more chapters. The wait will soon be over.
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makito
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Feb 3, 2005 |
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Exgellent story. Quality writing. I hope this author continues this tale. Thanks. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Aug 7, 2005)
- Thanks makito. The story will most definitely continue. After a long hiatus I am now back into writing and will continue this story, hopefully keeping my readers happy and entertained.
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littleslut
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Aug 3, 2004 |
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A story that has both wonderful technical accuracy and a fantastic plot combined with well developed characters. Well done!! (10/10)
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sugeneg
(Edit) (Aug 5, 2004)
- Thank you very much littleslut. The characters are really what is important to me in any story and I try to get inside their heads, show their motivation and reactions to the situations they find themselves in. I feel that is so much more satisfying for a reader to know than to have every fall of the lash described. I am doing my best but if you, or anyone really, has any suggestions for improvement I would love to hear them.
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mkemse
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Jul 27, 2004 |
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amazingly intresting story, i usualy find weak points in a story, where it builds up and up then stops, i did not find it wtih this one
hope all your stories remian this good (9/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2004)
- Thank you very much mkemse. pig has a long way to go and I hope to keep building on the solid base I have shaped so far. I have many story ideas in the works but pig will be around for a long time to come.
I would also like to take this opportunity to thank all of my reviewers and all those who have encouraged me to keep going with this story. I am writing for you so it means a lot to know that someone is interested and indeed appreciates what I am doing. Thanks again.
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texswim
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Jul 23, 2004 |
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I want to also say that for your first work, this is great. Keep up the good work. I am anxiously waiting for the additional chapters. The story is a great mixture of humiliation, pain and D/S. I love the concept of the distressed prisoner, especially where the prisoner does not know what is coming next. Again, keep this story coming! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Jul 26, 2004)
- Thank you very much texswim. It is always gratifying to hear from someone who is impressed by my efforts. I hope to keep your interest for many chapters to come.
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wabbit
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Jun 30, 2004 |
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If this is a first time effort,i want to be around for the 2nd effort!!! *S*....What a wonderfully written,well crafted story,full of erotic description and nicely paced...Is the girl in prison theme over used?...Maybe, but i challenge all to come up with a theme in this genre that isn't...Fantastic work Jason, KEEP WRITING !!! (9/10)
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sugeneg
(Edit) (Jul 1, 2004)
- Thanks wabbit. My second effort - well that will be vastly different in style and scope and I too hope you will be around for it. The 'girl in prison' theme is one I adore but have been unable to find many examples of, apart from Cold Heaven pointed out by lex. If anyone has any other good stories in this genre I would love to hear about them. And you're right wabbit, there are only so many basic story ideas in bdsm, the trick is to come up with a new angle or twist to make it seem original and believable again. I hope I am able to achieve that to some degree.
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gangaze
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Jun 27, 2004 |
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very very well writen story I love reading this sort of stories.
Can not wait for next chapter. hoping future story include some humilations from companies frends guy and femail visiting jail. And if she stay more time nude while other inmate clothed. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Jun 27, 2004)
- Thanks gangaze, I love writing these types of stories. I promise not to take so long with the next chapter. It will be a while before pig sees a man but you will just have to wait and see what the poor girl must undergo now she is on the wing.
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newwmember
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May 4, 2004 |
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Sorry to rate your story only now. Why I rate 9/10 : Extremely well written, the author wastes no time to go in details as precis as possible, although there is no gratis brutality (fortunately) the story and the "ambiente" is very heavy. Lex is right with the comparison of Cold Heaven, but there are a lot of readers enjoying the "life" in women prisons. So please go one with this story (9/10)
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Nov 3, 2010)
- Thanks very much for the praise. I always have to remember when writing erotica not to get too elaborate with my structure or language and forget that the main aim is to excite. I have a few other ideas on the burn but I will get pig well and truly settled before starting anything else.
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lex ludite
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Apr 29, 2004 |
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This is a very good beginning, but the subject matter has been worked to death. The writing is more than competent; descriptive and disciplined with a strong vocabulary. Unfortunately I've met these characters before and the plot sounds awfully familiar. I would describe this story to date as "Cold Haven" lite. To paraphrase something I heard over and over during my bout with formal education, "It will be left as an exercise for the author to show that my critique is overly pessimstic." I look forward to his response in future chapters.
It is quite obvious that my pessimism was totally unwarranted. This latest input is astonishing in its detail and the level of degradation that Emily is suffering. What makes it even more horrifying is the insidious and constant brain washing she is receiving.These characters are straight out of the twisted mind of a Mr. Ed, which is meant as a compliment. I am almost afraid to start reading the next installment, but I will suck it up and do my best. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Apr 29, 2004)
- Not quite sure what "Cold Haven" lite means. Throughout my reading I have come across very few prison stories, and those I did find were quite short and perfunctory, so I thought I would try my hand. Thanks for the critique and I do hope to prove you "overly pessimistic".
Thank you lex. I am very glad you found the initial pessimism unfounded. But never fear lex no harm shall come to pig (nb. my defintion of 'harm' may differ from that of the dictionary).
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thehuntedone
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Apr 26, 2004 |
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I have been reading this kind of fiction for a long time, and yes this idea (womens prison) has been visited before. This effort seems quite fresh to me and very well written. I like to rate things on their own merits so well done. Keep up the insults, my favourite parts so far. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
sugeneg
(Edit) (Apr 29, 2004)
- Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate any comments on my writing. I am glad I could bring something fresh to, it seems, an old idea. The prison story has always been a favourite of mine and so I am trying to bring something different from the run of the mill lez-sex-romp/whorehouse prison story. Have no fear the insults shall continue.
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e.e. norcod
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Apr 26, 2004 |
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As usual I agree with lex although I give a slightly higher rating. Actually, lex's review was quite complimentary (for him) and I believe justified. This author has made a very promising start and I must give praise for a pretty fair understanding of the Foley catheter. Keep up the good work and I am sure that my (and probably lex's) ratings will go up with further chapters. I am quite interested to see what kind of chastisements "pig" has earned! (7/10)
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Nov 3, 2010)
- Thank you for your review. I always try to research those areas I have no personal knowledge of and having a sub nurse as a friend helps in many ways. I hope you will continue to follow pig's story and I hope I can build on the promising start.
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WackySpurtz
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Apr 22, 2004 |
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Seven oinks for Pig. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Nov 3, 2010)
- Thanks for the oinks Wacky.
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