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Sisterly Love
Author: Atomage
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(Added on Jul 7, 2007)
(This month 61513 readers) (Total 86033 readers) |
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Two members of SUFFER enjoy an evening of family entertainment |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 15, 2010 |
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i agree with Carla and H. Dean, theer are to many mistakes and repeated words that i had a struggle following the story. It was so bad that i gave up trying to work out the relationship of all the characters. (5/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 30, 2009 |
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Seems I'm surrounded by school teacher types here. The pretention of some people. Okay, so I sometimes am gutted too by spelling and other mistakes, but since we're not at school, I (almost) never let that influence my appreciation for the story.
So, what about the story then.
Well, I liked the settings and dialogue, but for some reason I found everything too clinical, too distant, couldn't "get into" the story, so to speak.
JJ (8/10)
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Mothbrad
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Aug 12, 2007 |
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Atomage, I'm hoping that this story continues, and that the SUFFER organisation (?) spins off lots more stories. There's something hypnotic about your writing style, and I think it might turn some people off, but I found the story quite understandable, even while being a bit ... unusual grammatically. (7/10)
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H Dean
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Jul 10, 2007 |
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Questionable wording makes the reading a bit off and it was clear that the author was trying too hard with the imagery. Not the first author to have done so. My main complaint is the terrible punctuation that was this story's trademark. There were numerous misplaced commas, no commas where they should have been, incomplete and run on sentences and other irritating mistakes that really kept me from enjoying this story. In fact, I had to re-read so much of the story that I couldn't finish it. Usually, when a story is this poorly written I do not rate it as well as I have rated this story, but there is potential in this story - this author - if he takes a little more time, learns to edit his stories and forgets the styling of classic action/fantasy authors and gets to his own style. (5/10)
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gerda6969
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Jul 10, 2007 |
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Love the thought of being in the latex sac ,tubed , plugged and catheterised and hope you can do more on those sorts of matters. Before we had a slight disagreement about waders (!!) you sent me some perfect stories that would do well herein particular those involving maggots. (8/10)
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cala
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Jul 9, 2007 |
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Atom, do you proof read? There are far too many silly mistakes that could be corrected by proofreading. Those mistakes disrupt the reader's enjoyment of your story. (5/10)
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