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Mella\'s Obsession
Author: Molly Dunleavy
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(Added on Jan 24, 2009)
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Mella must submit to Master Ben for punishment after committing multiple sins during her day. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 2, 2009 |
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Well written, but the story feels too much like a dry account of events. It's nice to have some icing on a cake, but when there's so much icing you can't see what's underneath, you get a tad apprehensive to eat the cake.
Here, what's been written so far, is the icing on a cake, but sadly, the cake is missing.
Story would have been far-out if we would be able to get a more intimate glimpse inside of Mella's head, instead of getting the facts of what's being done to her.
Molly Dunleavy shows promise as a writer, all we have to do is urge her to read a couple of psychology books.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Tleanne5664
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Jan 28, 2009 |
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Please finish it! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
skp2bear
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Jan 25, 2009 |
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much more please. (10/10)
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