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An Unwilling Bride
Author: ditzylilgirl
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(Added on Jul 4, 2011)
(This month 67830 readers) (Total 88822 readers) |
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Margaret is a young girl from a repressive community. She dreams of running away to study at university, but her parents have other plans for her. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chirachauaapache
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Jan 21, 2016 |
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Again, very well done ditzylilgirl. I like very much that you were able to create such an erotic, essentially BDSM, story without using any BDSM elements such as nipple clamps and sexy spankings. This is not traditional BDSM but is written in such a delightful way! More please. I see you have one other story posted. I will read that too and if the forum will allow me I will comment on it as well. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Oh, I particularly liked "The reception was held in the yard around Dwayne’s home." Such a red neck touch that goes so well with Dwayne's character. Its touches like this that sets your stories apart from other stories, i.e. not just BDSM slaves and beatings but insight into the humans you write about. Great! (10/10)
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littleone_
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Aug 8, 2011 |
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Hot and well written with a lot of imagination. Ditzylilgirl is one of the few writers using a female pen name that i believe is really female. She is so in the girls mind! The only reason for the 8 instead of the 10 is that i no longer give unfinished stories a 10. So many authors abandon there stories, you know. If this one is fully developed and given an ending sometime I am sure it will rate a solid ten. After posting my review I read another one where the author said she may not finish this story. Once more the readers get teased but never kissed. I had to drop the score because of the lack of desire by the author to finish it. If that does happen, or even appears to be happening, I'll move the score back up. (3/10)
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nassim
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Jul 25, 2011 |
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Another masterpiece. More! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
ditzylilgirl
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2011)
- There's that exaggeration again! Thank you for the encouragement!
But I am a bit curious, what exactly makes this story a masterpiece in your eyes?
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nassim
(Edit) (Aug 2, 2011)
- As Venom pointed out, just enough back story is given to make the concept interesting, but not too much back story, which can be a little dull. Also like the body types of your heroines as well as the fact that they possess a modicum of intelligence.
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Venom
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Jul 19, 2011 |
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All in all a well developed story without any over the top elements -- fresh, free of clichés, yet somehow classic. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
ditzylilgirl
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2011)
- Thanks for the commentary. And here I thought that I was going over the top!
Also, thanks for the comments on the forum!
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spankinglover
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Jul 10, 2011 |
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Great start, I enjoyed getting into Margret's head as her situation got to her. Plus the great dialogue from the side characters. Can't wait to see what happens next. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
ditzylilgirl
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2011)
- Thanks! I don't know if I will continue with this story, but I posted another one, although it's not as "tame" as this one and I'm working on another too.
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